My Favourite Video Game
Call of Duty: Black ops is my favourite video game because it is a really fun game to play, there has been 5.6 million copies of the game that have been sold, people like playing the game because it’s a very popular game and most people would have fun playing Call of Duty: Black ops. I like playing Call of Duty: Black ops because it has lots of things you can do on it like campaign, multiplayer, and zombies. I think zombies and multiplayer are better when you go online to play people that are online. But when I play alone on zombies I usually make it up to round 8. When I’m playing multiplayer I sometimes make an alliance with the new people that are online if any of my team isn’t online but they usually are online. It’s always fun to play Call of Duty: Black ops.
it is good but you could more about the game like what game system
ReplyDeleteIt's great! Good spelling and grammer and long writing.
ReplyDeletethats good and really interesting u couldn write more about it.
ReplyDeleteGabby, you have written a fairly solid paragraph. Your introductory sentence is too long. You should have a period after "..fun game to play." Your conclusion is strong and concise. You also give a lot of good support in the middle. Overall, you've done very well.
ReplyDeleteSuggestions:
Black Ops, not Black ops
You have a couple run-on sentences (too long).
8/10