Fall at the lake, you could see the leaves falling, birds flying , and children making leaf piles and then jumping into them. You would hear ducks and geese getting ready to migrate, hear the animals scurrying around to make their nests. You could touch the water and then feel the coldness. You could feel the wind while it makes your face cold. You would hear the waves splashing against the docks. You world smell the fresh air. It would be nice and quiet at the lake while it is fall
Good Job Gabby! =)
ReplyDeletei like the prat with the migrate and good read
ReplyDeletegood job gabby you impress me
ReplyDeleteGood job Gabby I like the part when you talked about touching the water. I disliked how you didn't put them into paragraphs. But good job!
ReplyDeleteI liked the part about the leaf piles. great job Gabby.
ReplyDeleteuse more puncuation
ReplyDeleteGabrielle,
ReplyDeleteI like your title. I’m not sure why your margins don’t line up.
You have used some very good descriptive words and phrases. I was able to get a good visual picture in my head as I was reading.
I found the “tense” you chose to write in a little distracting (you could, you would, etc).
With the class time we spent on this assignment, I was hoping for a little more length.
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