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Gabrielle, Leave one space under your title. Numerous punctuation issues. Introduction: You mention things in the introduction that you don’t write about later. All ideas in the introduction should be supported later in your writing. Supporting Paragraphs: Your first supporting paragraph is a little repetitive, but overall, you have done a good job here. Conclusion: You also bring up new ideas in your conclusion. Your conclusion should only restate the main ideas from your three supportive paragraphs. Overall, this is a good first effort at expository writing. You followed the structure fairly well. Your ideas will gain strength as your word choice and punctuation improve. 17/25
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Leave one space under your title.
Numerous punctuation issues.
Introduction: You mention things in the introduction that you don’t write about later. All ideas in the introduction should be supported later in your writing.
Supporting Paragraphs: Your first supporting paragraph is a little repetitive, but overall, you have done a good job here.
Conclusion: You also bring up new ideas in your conclusion. Your conclusion should only restate the main ideas from your three supportive paragraphs.
Overall, this is a good first effort at expository writing. You followed the structure fairly well. Your ideas will gain strength as your word choice and punctuation improve.
17/25
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